the water
in the burnt rice pan
turns
swirls
returns
and
in
that
precise instant
becomes
the axis of the universe
A good exercise is to write about what you have just done. This could take the form of a set of instructions or, like this poem, an impressionistic account of a single second. Such exercises help to improve your chops.
This second example was written when I flew to Madrid to meet my wife and the hotel I was booked into was hosting a football team. I dislike sport and I found the sight of all these men running around the place in football gear rather surreal.
another love poem
that hotel you booked for me
was on a loser from the start
the reception cluttered as it was
by grown men in black and white football strip
who should have out grown that sort of thing by their age
but then look at me
pulled by my heart across Europe towards you
I think I prefer the first. The second is tell rather than show. It is always better to show than to tell.
Alela Diane has a new album out. She is touring too.
Until next time.
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